Still She Dances

At the corner of Chicago & Evans she stands, waiting.

A pirouette, perfectly executed.

A gracious bow, although you can see the tension beneath the perfect smile, you can see the boa constrictor muscles tightening, coiling, flexing in her shoulders – as though she’s nervous, on debut before the phantom applause.

She seems to fade as you approach her, her glamour wearing thin – it’s been years since the ballet, last toured, and still the ghost dances, near forgotten.

Written for this week’s Friday Fictioneers photo-prompt.

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25 thoughts on “Still She Dances

  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Chris,

    A lament for the ghost of the dancer. Well done. Good detail mining with the address. Adds a note of realism to the story.



  2. Gabriella says:

    I like your take on the photo and the wistful tone!

  3. Dear Chris,

    A poignant tale of past glories and wistful present.



  4. I wonder what made her choose this location to haunt and what might allow her to rest. I could feel her ghostly presence.


  5. misskzebra says:

    I absolutely adore the descriptions of her body movements, they’re incredible.

  6. vbholmes says:

    A provocative concept: the well-developed, athletic body seen as a ghostly apparition–you’ve done it well..

  7. summerstommy2 says:

    Well done Chris, I like the idea of loss that you portray.

  8. neenslewy says:

    Wonderful – ghost dancer – you describe a ballerina’s strong back muscles perfectly!

  9. Joe Owens says:

    I wonder if this corner was where the dancer met her demise?

  10. Jan Brown says:

    Beautiful description of a fine dancer–even if she is a ghost! Poignant story, well done.

  11. A ghost that’s more sad than scary. Nice job.

  12. Very unusual, haunting take on the prompt, nicely done.

  13. I do like a bit of ghastliness. This was ethereal, moving, poignant. Lovely job.

  14. a dancing ghost indeed, great writing

  15. rckjones says:

    What a lovely character sketch. I wondered too if she were a ballerina.

  16. annisik51 says:

    Our enigmatic female is encouraging lots of very inventive ghostly tales this week, like yours. One of our past houses was haunted. My husband saw ‘her’ eventually. I was entertained by your story. Well done.

  17. Ye Pirate says:

    Yes, a nice, nostalgic lament…real emotion there…

  18. troy P. says:

    This was a beautiful piece, Chris.

  19. JackieP says:

    Nicely done! Great feelings in it.

  20. Very clever. Great atmosphere. There is something sad about ballet dancers and I think you’ve captured some of it.

  21. bennitheblog says:

    Great piece! A spooky nostalgia…

  22. A great tale. I love the tension of being left behind…past glory fading.

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