Waiting

Her ring hit the floorboards, clattering.
The weight of dusk, the ache of waiting, waiting, waiting for a reply.
Water flooded her cheeks, fat, wet, crocodile tears.
She always needed a stage for her performances.

 

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9 thoughts on “Waiting

  1. Emma says:

    that ending was a huge bang!!! I loved this one chris! keep up your awesome writing!!!

  2. Tara R. says:

    A drama diva or a woman scorned? Great emotion in so few words.

  3. Mike says:

    Loved that ending.

  4. Nice job there at the end !

  5. Balvah says:

    Perfect ending.

  6. I know this woman. You’ve nailed it. Thanks for linking up, Chris.

  7. debseeman says:

    Oh the pain of waiting. I love your description of crying. It’s visual as well as emotional.

  8. Draug419 says:

    I like the first line. The rest is great too.

  9. jannatwrites says:

    Hmmm…I was thinking woman scorned until that last line…now I’m thinking I understand why he’s not there 🙂

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