Calling Out Your Name

Friday Fictioneers Prompt (it’s been a while)

The carousel clicks and clacks, shuddering against the weight born on its back, endlessly circling, circling.

Ragged breathing and a constant murmuring floods the air – a droning, echoing cacophony. Around and around temporary worshippers turn, weaving toward connecting flights, shadowing those arcane prayer-wheels in the bowels of the beast.

The sun sets, the night full of tangerine promise as golden disc plummets, blazing on the tails of steel eagles temporarily grounded. The night wakes and emotions run high, amplifying the carousels’ tracery of arcane runes.

Far below the Old Gods hear their names.

Far below the Old Gods are stirring.

My first Friday Fictioneers drabble for a long while – comments and criticism always welcome! 

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10 thoughts on “Calling Out Your Name

  1. I do believe this is my favorite this week and well worth the wait. “the night full of tangerine promise”–one of my favorite lines. Love the sounds in this piece as well. Your writing makes me sigh.

  2. deanabo says:

    This is brilliant!

  3. Fantastic ending. That repitition works wonderfully.

  4. rich says:

    it is not always a good idea to wake the old gods. well done.

  5. I do like “tangerine promise”.

  6. Mike says:

    Wonderful sound fx and symbolism with a classic climax. Very well done.

  7. I’ll never look at the airport quite the same way after this. Never thought of it as a house of worship before. 😉
    shalom,
    Rochelle

  8. Excellent diverse take on an airport! Glad you’re back, although I always find it a bit disconcerting when I go to read a story and the theme of the blog is the same as mine. The first time that happened, I thought I’d somehow gotten back to mine but wondered why the story wasn’t mine. 🙂

    janet

  9. Heidi White says:

    Oh – tangerine promise. What a line!

  10. Beautiful language Chris . 🙂

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