A Job Well Done

She could feel it cutting the air, unspoken, hidden beneath the veneer of polite conversation and political civilisation. A hollow echo, an absence that none remember. An intention, whispered words offered up to the heavens. There it was again a broken string. A shadow lying beneath their lilting, birdsong voices.

The crowd entwined, now mingling, now dispersed. A Gordian knot, and here she stood, caught without a blade. A circus, a carousel. A nest of vipers. She watched them dance, followed the ebb and flow of the ballroom.

She saw her victim, the culprit.

Silence enveloped him beneath her swiftly moving shawl – his death was unpleasant. Surgical brutality.

The assassin smiled.


Just a short little drabble, a descriptive piece to get back up to speed. Written for this week’s Trifecta Writing Challenge word Intention but I missed the deadline (as usual.) The story also features the InMon prompts Broken String and None Remember. Comments and criticism always welcome!

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10 thoughts on “A Job Well Done

  1. Haha! Just to clarify, Chris didn’t ‘like’ his own post – It was me but he was still signed into wordpress haha

  2. Draug419 says:

    Ooo how I wish this had made the deadline! I love the various descriptions of the ballroom and the crowd!

  3. Very atmospheric — it would be interesting to see a bit more of her thought process, too.

  4. marc nash says:

    surgical cutting of the Gordian knot – I rather like that

  5. Any self-respecting assassin should be surgicallly brutal. A very pretty piece, despite the subject matter!

  6. I like how you give very few specifics of setting, but we still get a picture of colorful, swirling skirts and laughter and everybody absorbed in gaiety except this one woman closing in for the kill. Amalia had it right – atmospheric.

  7. […] A Job Well Done by ChrisWhiteWrites ~ @chriswhitewrite ~ Less than 500 words ~ Urban Fantasy […]

  8. Mike says:

    Gruesomely good. Thanks for a great read.

  9. ganymeder says:

    Very interesting. I’m actually not sure who the victim is here! 🙂

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